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Writing Good Dialogue Part 2

Writing good dialogue is more than getting the mechanics right. It is one of the most important parts of characterization. Here’s some things to remember when writing good dialogue.

Character:Your characters will determine how you write dialogue. Every person’s speech pattern is different and dialogue should reflect that. If your dialogue shows enough characterization, readers will often recognize the person speaking without the tags and identifiers. Here’s a few things to ask yourself when determining a speech pattern for a character.

Is it a male or female? Women tend to use more words and to talk emotionally where men are concise and logical.

What area of the country is your character from? If your character is from Ohio, he’ll call a soda drink pop. If he’s from Tennessee, he’ll call it coke.

Is the character educated? College graduates usually don’t say ain’t, but illiterate people or those who live in the country do. Also someone who has dropped out of school and joined a gang at age 15, probably wouldn’t know what some 3 syllable words mean no matter how smart he is.

What is your character’s background? Someone living in New York City probably wouldn’t use colorful country phrases unless he originally came from Alabama. Background makes a difference.

What is your character’s personality? Some people are shy and backward. They would use fewer words than somebody who is a vivacious leader. The leader is more likely to take charge of a situation and bark orders.

Dialect: A character’s background and education is likely to affect his dialect. It’s important to show that through dialogue. However one thing you want to avoid is to phonetically spell dialect. Hint at a person’s dialect, and the reader will automatically sound out the phonetic spelling. But if you spell the words phonetically, you’ll draw the reader away from the story and slow down his reading.

Speech Patterns: Use natural sounding speech patterns in your dialogue. Use contractions unless the characters are formal, educated, and historical. Everybody in today’s world speaks in contractions. Most of the time, you’ll want to use words like yeah and nope depending on the character. If your character is a dear old aunt who would say “oh, my” after hitting her thumb with a hammer, by all means, use it. If your character is a grizzly Vietnam Vet, you may not want him saying “oh my”. Use speech patterns that fit your characters.

No Info Dumps: Don’t use dialogue to give info dumps in the story. Here’s an example of a dialogue info dump.

“As you know,” Tom said “your father left you mother when you were only two years old.”

As you know is a dead giveaway. Why would Tom tell somebody about her father leaving her mother. She would know that better than Tom. Another example of this is if one police officer tells another police officer the procedure they follow when they’ve both been on the force for twenty years, or in a historical novel, one person tells another a fact that is common knowledge for that time period to inform the reader of the historical knowledge. This should always be avoided. Find another way to relay information.

Mimicking Speech: Even though you want dialogue to sound natural, you don’t want it to sound exactly the way people talk. If you did, you would add a lot of ahs, and you knows. Dialogue should sound good when read out loud. It should make the character articulate about what she wants to say in a way people rarely are.

Important to the Story: Everything we write should be important to the story and carry it along. That is true especially true of dialogue. Don’t have a conversation between your characters on what’s for dinner unless it’s important to the story.

Good dialogue is intentional like every other part of fiction writing.

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Writing Good Dialogue Part 1

Writing good dialogue is one of the most important techniques of fiction writing. But often, many writers consider it one of the hardest things to do. Hopefully these pointers will help.

Grammar and punctuation: When writing dialogue, place the spoken part in quotation marks. Start a new paragraph every time somebody else speaks.

Example:

“Jill,” Tom said, “you’re driving me crazy. I can’t deal with your lies anymore.”

“I’m not lying,” Jill said.

When a character is interrupted, use a dash at the end of the sentence. When a character’s speech trails off so he doesn’t finish, use eclipses or ….

Resist the Urge to Explain (RUE): One mistake common in dialogue is to explain what the person is saying and how he says it. Don’t do this. It insults the reader and weakens the dialogue. If the dialogue is not strong enough to stand on it’s own, consider rewriting. I’ll give a bad example to show how you can explain too much.

Example:

“Jill,” Tom said exasperated, “you’re driving me crazy. I can’t deal with your lies anymore.” He was angry.

“I’m not lying,” Jill said as she tried to defend herself.

Tags: Tags are sometimes needed to show who is talking. Sometimes writers try to get creative with their tags and use as many synonyms for said as they can. This is a mistake. When you need a tag, use said unless there’s a good reason not to. Readers tend to skim over the word said, but other tags bring notice to the word choice instead of the dialogue and story. Many times these other tags violate the RUE guideline. Here’s an example of the wrong way to do it.

Example:

“Jill,” Tom replied, “you’re driving me crazy. I can’t deal with your lies anymore.”

“I’m not lying,” Jill explained.

“I hired a private investigator,” Tom exhorted. “He told we where you were all day.”

“No,” Jill shouted. “How could you do that to me? You don’t trust me.”

“I want the truth,” Tom demanded.

It can get worse if you use tags that don’t make sense.

Another Example:

“Jill,” Tom frowned, “you’re driving me crazy. I can’t deal with your lies anymore.” (Most people don’t frown their words.)

“I’m not lying,” Jill sighed. (It’s hard to talk when you’re sighing.)

“I hired a private investigator,” Tom grimaced. “He told we where you were all day.” (Ever try to speak through a grimace?)

“No,” Jill cried. “How could you do that to me? You don’t trust me.” (Most people say their words, they don’t cry them.)

Other examples of this are smiled, chuckled, and laughed. Always have your characters speak their words. The easiest way to do this is he or she said.

Said is the best tag to use, but only use it when needed. If there are only two people in a room talking to each other, you won’t have to identify who is talking by Jill said/Tom said as often as when there’s a roomful of people.

Names: Sometimes writers try to avoid using said by having the characters call each other by name. The problem with this technique is it sounds contrived. People don’t constantly call each other by name.

Bad Example:

“Jill,” Tom said, “you’re driving me crazy. I can’t deal with your lies anymore.”

“I’m not lying, Tom.”

“I hired a private investigator, Jill. He told we where you were all day.”

“No, Tom How could you do that to me? You don’t trust me.”

“I want the truth, Jill.”

Beats: Beats are actions the characters do while their talking. They can be used effectively.

Example:

“Jill,” Tom said, “you’re driving me crazy. I can’t deal with your lies anymore.”

“I’m not lying.” Jill’s chest tightened.

“I hired a private investigator.” Tom’s hands balled into fists and dangled at his side. “He told we where you were all day.”

“No.” Jill backed up to the counter where she’d stashed the gun. “How could you do that to me? You don’t trust me.”

“I want the truth.” Tom raised his fist and strode toward her.

You can see from this example that the story evolves when using beats. But use beats cautiously. They can be overused when used as only as a tool only to get rid of said. The beats need to be an important part of the story.

Next Monday, Writing Good Dialogue Part 2 will be about dialect and natural sounding speech patterns.

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